Friday, March 12, 2010

WALT: use fullstops, capital letters and ?

The gargantuan whale smashed down the stern of the ship. Crash! the whale has been hit by a harpoon. The whale went down and a torpedo flung in the air blew up. It mixed with the ships oil, cadosh! Splat the ship smashed to smithereens like pouring salt on a snail or a volcano exploding. Cadosh a massive submarine exploded into the air, fire the torpedos a voice shouted. At first they looked like rocks, and they got bigger and bigger. Splat! the whales blood flew through the air like a black bird plane. The people from the ship, their blood was everywhere, beep beep beep... BOOM! The submarine exploded. Blood flew everywhere. The 7 seas are no longer, they are now the 7 seas of blood.

A lovely description Luke. You have used level 2 punctuation and some level 3, great stuff. I especially like the similes you included. Keep up the awesome imagination Luke. Mrs S

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