Thursday, May 21, 2009

More Show not tell!

We were inspired by a clip from Harry Potter and look at these wonderful sentences:

It was a dark day and Harry came swooping around the castle on his broom stick. He felt nervous. The dark creature loomed from behind a fire lit rock. Nasty, swooping, scaly wings spread across the sky. Silence began. Hannah

Harry hid behind a magma rock. As he tried to catch his breath a burst of flames melted the rock. Harry called his broom, voom, wish it flew as fast as a cheetah. Sapphira

He was ready to pounce on Harry who was screaming and puffing under a cracking rock. Kate

Nervously Harry approached the dome waiting for the giant creature to pounce. Elizabeth

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